|Put some action into your sentences|
Correcting and Improving
Iimproving your sentences is not difficult. Put the action back into your sentences. Here are two specific methods you can use.
- Go back to your writing. look for obvious nouns such as recommendation, observation, consultation, improvement, developmentt, and turn them into verbs. Then , find a real subject and rewrite the sentence with some action in it.
- Whenever you see general purpose verbs such as carry out, have, undertake, conduct, there is, there are " look for the noun that names the action. Then, turn the noun into an active verb and make the sentence more direct and easier to read (Christopher Turk and Alfred John Kirkman, Effective Writing: Improving Scientific, Technical, and Business Communication, 2nd ed. Chapman & Hall, 1989)
Too many nouns
There was a recommendation to change.
There is an improvement in your work.
There is rapid development in my city.
My parents made a suggestion.
The government made an announcement.
Our group made a report.
There has been a suggestion.
Overuse of the land has caused destruction.
Change the nouns to verbs
We recommended a change.
Your work is improving.
My city is rapidly developing.
My parents suggested....
The government announced....
Our group reported...
The boss suggested.....
Overused of the land has destroyed it.
What do you think about this? Let me know.